Eternal Haiku

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Postby Zansi'Vara » Sat Apr 16, 2016 9:01 am

Hey, I had an idea earlier of an old writing exercise I used to do in a creative writing class I took in high school, where essentially you would just pass around a page with a series of haikus, with each new haiku beginning with the last line of the previous one. I figured it might be a cool thing to try out here. It always seems to bring out some awesome concepts and ideas from people.

For those who aren't aware, the standard format of a haiku is measured in syllables, the first line having 5, the second, 7, and the third, 5 again.

I suppose I'll start
With a blade in the darkness
This shit is Ninja

So, next person who wants to join, your first line will be "This shit is Ninja". Who want's to try it out? :D
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Postby MAK » Sat Apr 16, 2016 12:25 pm

This shit is Ninja
Newbies can eat shit and die
Bitch, do you feel me?
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Postby Zansi'Vara » Sat Apr 16, 2016 6:08 pm

Bitch, do you feel me?
Do you hear my feeble thoughts?
Help me remember
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Postby DJ_Darkside » Sat Apr 16, 2016 8:12 pm

Help me remember
What the fuck is a haiku?
why does my head hurt
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I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I am not. Kurt Cobain
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Postby AliceElite » Sat Apr 16, 2016 8:28 pm

why does my head hurt
like one hundred stomping feet
my heart beats gladly
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Postby Zansi'Vara » Sat Apr 16, 2016 8:36 pm

My heart beats gladly
Do I deserve all of this?
Will I ever know?
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Postby girlapaloo » Tue Apr 19, 2016 5:32 pm

Zansi'Vara wrote:My heart beats gladly
Do I deserve all of this?
How can I ever know?


Ummmm ...Zansi wanna fix the last line so it has 5 syllables? :) <3
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Postby Zansi'Vara » Tue Apr 19, 2016 5:33 pm

girlapaloo wrote:
Zansi'Vara wrote:My heart beats gladly
Do I deserve all of this?
Will I ever know?


Ummmm ...Zansi wanna fix the last line so it has 5 syllables? :) <3


Whoops, that'll happen when you're drunk. One sec. xD

Fixed :3
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Postby girlapaloo » Tue Apr 19, 2016 5:37 pm

Zansi'Vara wrote:
girlapaloo wrote:
Zansi'Vara wrote:My heart beats gladly
Do I deserve all of this?
Will I ever know?


Ummmm ...Zansi wanna fix the last line so it has 5 syllables? :) <3


Whoops, that'll happen when you're drunk. One sec. xD

Fixed :3


No judgment, just want to see this thread move along because I like it :)
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Postby Zansi'Vara » Tue Apr 19, 2016 5:39 pm

girlapaloo wrote:
Zansi'Vara wrote:
girlapaloo wrote:
Ummmm ...Zansi wanna fix the last line so it has 5 syllables? :) <3


Whoops, that'll happen when you're drunk. One sec. xD

Fixed :3


No judgment, just want to see this thread move along because I like it :)


For sure, I really like the idea too. I think when I was writing it I erased and rewrote the second half of the last line, and just didn't recount the syllables before posting it. xD
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Postby girlapaloo » Tue Apr 19, 2016 5:58 pm

Will I ever know?
My brain says yes, I want to
My heart says don't care
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Postby Zansi'Vara » Tue Apr 19, 2016 6:01 pm

My heart says, "Don't care"
I have tried for so long but,
Love is all I have
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Postby DJ_Darkside » Tue Apr 19, 2016 7:05 pm

Love is all I have
At least it feels like it's true
No it was a fart
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ALL HAIL LIEUTENANT DOCTOR COOLCHUNKIA ESQUIRE THE THIRD JR.!!! Lest she blow chunks of cool up yo asssss!!!
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Postby girlapaloo » Tue Apr 19, 2016 7:56 pm

o_O
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Postby Zansi'Vara » Tue Apr 19, 2016 8:02 pm

No, it was a fart
Wet and loud, it permeates
The air is not safe
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Postby MAK » Wed Apr 20, 2016 11:16 am

The air is not safe
My intestines are nasty
How will the turd be?
<3
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Postby Zansi'Vara » Thu Apr 21, 2016 2:10 am

How will the turd be?
My prayers to Porcelain Gods,
Do they go unheard?
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Postby Rivoc » Thu Apr 21, 2016 2:38 am

Do they go unheard?
Or do prayers go unnoticed?
How can we know this?
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Postby BriarRose » Thu Apr 21, 2016 3:44 am

How can we know this?
The universe unending,
but we are finite.
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Postby PhlawlessPhelon » Thu Apr 21, 2016 5:34 am

This is my new favorite lit thread, I'll try to join in when my brain isn't destroyed from writing all night.
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Postby Zansi'Vara » Thu Apr 21, 2016 5:38 am

Thank you, Phelon. ^_^ I'm so glad people are liking this. I thought it might be a nice exercise to get people writing more, even if it's just a little poem it helps to get those creative juices flowing. :D

But we are finite
An abstraction of stardust
The stars watch themselves
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Postby girlapaloo » Fri Apr 22, 2016 2:34 pm

the stars watch themselves
moonlight illuminates us
wrapped in contentment
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Postby Rivoc » Sat Apr 23, 2016 4:41 am

Wrapped in contentment
On another continent
No more condiments.
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Postby Rivoc » Sat Apr 23, 2016 4:42 am

Side note I'm not much of a writer but I am creative. I suck at art and I really like this outlet. I applaud this thread as well!
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Postby DJ_Darkside » Sat Apr 23, 2016 4:55 am

^^ Seconded

No more condiments
My Mayonnaise has gone dry
My Hot Dog is bare
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I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I am not. Kurt Cobain
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ALL HAIL LIEUTENANT DOCTOR COOLCHUNKIA ESQUIRE THE THIRD JR.!!! Lest she blow chunks of cool up yo asssss!!!
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/anna hack! :kiss:

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